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I remember fragments
Did you smile that way then
Was there malice in that curved bow
Or was it lust that made you stare so
Did I ask for you to stroke my hair
To kiss my forehead
And hold me tight in your embrace
It is all so faded now
Yet seeing you here
That shock of red
The jade so pure
I know the shade in you
Are they real tears
Or the imitations I used to know so well?
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:iconseveredwing:
Beautiful. Simply beautiful. My eyes have glassed over with tears. Deep down I believe every emotion Axel ever felt for Roxas was true, and not some shadow of his former self. Too much passion, too much devotion for any of it to be fake.

To say more I fear will make the tears fall. *sighs* Simply beautiful.
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~mercurius11 Jun 8, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, I am so honoured you like it - I agree with you, they are too perfect for it not be real love. Thank you so much for such a comment :blushes:

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:iconhalfazn-eyes:
Sorry for teh delayed comment :o I haven't checked my messages on this account since school started x-x

This is lovely <3 you never cease to amaze me o3o The poem flows so nicely, and it's so... "pretty" if you know what I mean ^^; It's so intruiging how it seems so full of emotion and yet completely void of emotion at the same time.

Ah, great, now I've gone and confused myself :XD: But great work, I love it <3
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~mercurius11 Dec 8, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, thanks for such an insightful comment. I was trying to capture the sense of feeling a nobody like Axel would have, someone who is not supposed to feel yet somehow does. I confused myself writing it!
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:iconmegamishi:
ohh man i love how simple this is, but with a lot of insight. and .. and love <3
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~mercurius11 Dec 8, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks ever so much for your comment :-)
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Mood: Delighted ~wrathling Sep 27, 2006  Student Digital Artist
*clap clap* yay! wonderful, like all of you poems!
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Mood: Bliss ~wrathling Sep 27, 2006  Student Digital Artist
*clap clap* yay! wonderful, like all of you poems!
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~mercurius11 Sep 30, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, thanks so much honey! I am a real fan of these two ;-)
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~wrathling Sep 30, 2006  Student Digital Artist
i can tell ^^
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